Tuesday, July 22, 2008
Short story

I have written a short story, please post comments (constructive comments) and also I will post my notes for the story afterwards.
*I haven't given it a title yet.



The hall was empty, save the pillars which gave an eerie feel. The moonlight shining through the broken windows completed the ambience.
He tormented me.
The gun rested in his hand, blood dripping from his fist. A body lay on the ground, and the perpetrator stood at his side a few meters away.
I loved him as my own.
“Why?” The girl by his side wept, crawling towards the body and trembling at the sight, “Why?”
I gave him everything, I trusted him.
The girl reached the body, and she shook him, trying to wake him up from his eternal slumber. The standing man dropped his gun, the sound echoing through the halls, ricocheting from every corner.
I hated him.
“Justin…why? WHY?!”
He gave me strength, he gave me thought.
Justin walked over to be in the view of the girl; she glared at him, tears flowing down her pale and gentle face. “Justin, he wanted to help you…why did you…why did you…”
He gave me a life to live.
“Why?” Justin stood by the girl, “I don’t think that should be the question now, Alexius, not why, not why…”
Justin stepped towards her, closer and closer, and then said.
“Not why, Alexius…But WHAT did you not do about it…”
A gun appeared into his hand, and its nozzle aimed right at her head.

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